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More and more wild animals are on the verge of extinction and many are endangered. What are the causes of it and what measures can be taken to solve it?

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In the modern world, due to overpopulation the forests are being destroyed. Our actions are responsible for the global
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 of the animals all over the world. The forests are being cleared everyday which is the homes of lots of animals.
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 essay will discuss the main reasons of animal's
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 and the steps which we can perform to stop it. One of the main reasons of animal
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 is deforestation. Due to the increase in public demands, trees are being chopped down, hectares of the area is being cleared to make factories, residences. We are destroying the homes of many wild animals to build our houses. Apart from that, the daily use plastic is killing the animals on a global level.
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, In a recent survey conducted by the marine biologists, it was found that plastic has wiped out more than 10 species of sea turtles from the Earth. The government should spread awareness and ban single use plastic,
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 only we can protect the planet from global
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. Another reason for
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 is the money, in the eagerness of earning more and more money, people sell animal skins, horns etc. They hunt animals so that they can sell their body parts and make good amount of money.
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, even though the hunting of Rhinoceros is banned in India, many people still kill them and sell their horns. They should be protected from the hunters and there should be proper conservation parks where they can live. In conclusion, there are many factors which lead the animals to the verge of
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. It should be our duty to protect them and take proper measures to save the environment. They have the same right of the Earth as the humans do.

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