When a country develops its technology, the traditional skills and the ways of life die out. It is pointless to try and keep them alive.

Entertaining international events became a popular trend since the
last
century. I believe that these events are crucial, and might ease tensions between
two
countries that do not have normal diplomatic relations. They are
also
beneficial in terms of relieving patriotic affection in an innocuous way. In
this
essay, I will explore the rationale for my own viewpoint on the matter. Major sport international events like Olympic games and World Cup Football have always aimed to entertain people. In
this
regard, every four years, many different nations
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plays
play
matches with each other in a friendly manner in
such
tournaments. It happens sometimes that
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the two countries
two countries
do not have normal diplomatic
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relations, but
relations but
the teams of these
two
countries played with each other and showed high fraternity in the match,
for instance
in World Cup 1998, the United States had to play against Iran despite the fact that the
two
countries did not have diplomatic relations;
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however, both the
however, the both
teams could alleviate the tensions between their countries. In
this
global era, the nationalism is not as strong as one hundred years ago, but still there are a few occasions
such
as universal sport competitions that the people who support their
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country
countries
in the championships could release patriotic feelings safely and no one could get hurt. On the personal scale,
this
might helpful for their health. Sometimes these feelings encourage supporters to invent new ways by creating some creative motions of supporting that might give the
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stadium, nice
stadium nice
views and motions with their own unique motions
such
moving hands of one
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side
sides
then
turn it to
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the other side
other side
. In sum, I maintain that the global athletic events have both national and personal
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advantages
advantage
. In the future, I hope that sports’ audiences find more creative ways to support their country team. Or governments around the world try to have more athletic events.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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