More children in developed countries are becoming overweight. This is a serious problem for wealthy countries. Discuss some causes and effects of this problem. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

A nowadays excessive mass of the human body becomes a big concern for health authorities. Most modern machines and gadgets are adding the extra fat on the latest generation, which is creating a top one issue for the rich nations. Multiple roots are involved in
this
scenario and the utmost one is the food, which we are taking not fresh and most of the time its frozen. Ice-covered eatable items are losing the goodness of natural things, which are not many full of protein, calcium, vitamin, etc. By taking
such
food, we are not getting those bio minerals & Amino but fat only, which affect the health of small ages. Another factor behind
this
issue was the high amount of vehicle, medical, hospital and very limited sports ground.
For example
, for the small kids physical game activity is highly important for their own growth and fitness, but due lack of facilities, they are not able to play the football, cricket, badminton etc., which
further
involve them in latest technological gadgets.
Suggestion
Then
then
after they are gaining the weight, but actually they are loosing their health by having unnecessary fat on the body.

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