Some people think is to produce happier society is to ensure that there is only a small difference on the earning on the richest and poorest member?

However

, certain advancements in technology are not affordable for the poorer sections of society. Modern medicine,

for example

, is expensive. There are many new drugs and diagnostic procedures which are very costly. Certain affluent people who developed cancer took treatment with a special kind of protein, which is very expensive, but had fewer side effects compared to conventional chemotherapy. Rich people can access these treatments by spending only a small portion of their income and improve their health. Poor people,

on the other hand

, have to spend all of their money on conventional treatments and yet there is no guarantee that the condition will improve. In conclusion, even though innovations in technology decrease the gap between rich and poor, while certain developments make society more polarized. It is an optimistic move that all technologies will be available to every person regardless of their economic status.

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Some people think is to produce happier society is to ensure that there is only a small difference on the earning on the richest and poorest member?

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

Many countries spend large amounts of money on world sporting events such as the Olympic Games and football World Cup. Instead these monies can be spent on encouraging young children to take up sports at a young age. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

In today's world, it is private companies rather than government who pay for and carry out most on scientific research. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

Some people think that it is the responsibility of governments to take care of the environment, while others believe that it is the responsibility of the citizens. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

It is often argued that it is difficult to get children to read. Why do you think this is? What measures could be taken to encourage children to read more? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Nowadays celebrities are more famous for their glamour and wealth than for their achievements and this sets bad example to young people. To what extent do you agree disagree?