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Some people think that environmental problems should be solved on a global scale while others believe it is better to deal with them nationally. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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In recent times, we all face a lot of problems that threaten our lives. With the increase of environmental concerning issues
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 as global warming, spreading infections and increasing drought. Some people think that the best way to tackle
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 frightening issue is by deal with the dilemma globally, while others believe that every nation have to solve their complication individually. Both points of views will be discussed and evaluated before draw the final conclusion. It can be seen that there are so many factors that play a major role in destroying our planet. Whether these factors are resulted from human activities or natural sources. People who advocate the idea of solving environmental problems in global domain are strongly believing in the benefit of cooperative work. When many countries work together to alleviate high temperature level by reducing the reliance on fossil fuels,
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 simple action will be effective in creating a cooling environment.
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, governments from many different parts of the world can build an efficient communication to discuss the matter,
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 improving and expanding their potential solutions.
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, many developing countries can benefit from scientific researches that are done in developing countries. 
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, proponents to the suggestion of every country has to solve its environmental problem may think
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 difficult to some countries to deal with the subject in large scale because they may have less environmental problems than other countries.
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, Some small countries like Bahrain does not have as much environmental problems as major and large city like Tokyo. As we all know that a lot of hurricanes and floods happen in Japan every year, so the Japanese have long experience with
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 kind of disaster will Bahrain know nothing about it.
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, When people have the ability to understand the issue, they will find a better solution to deal and solve it with no need the interfere others. In conclusion, I believe that we all live in the same world which require a lot from us. Environmental issues is
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absolutely a global concern that need to be wisely solved. One hand cannot clap, so countries have to broaden their efforts to save and protect the life in
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 invaluable planet to make it a better place for
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xt generation.
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By supporting cooperation between countries, especially those that focus on a scientific approach, will ensure continuing live in a safe environment.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • international cooperation
  • sovereign rights
  • Paris Agreement
  • climate change
  • ocean pollution
  • collective measures
  • economic interests
  • political will
  • enforcement issues
  • free-riders
  • tailor-made solutions
  • transboundary pollution
  • resource constraints
  • global frameworks
  • national efforts
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