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Advantages and disadvantages of cultural tourism

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Nowadays, cultural
tourism
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 is welcomed and encouraged in most countries, where it is seen both as an opportunity to display national treasures and achievements to visitors, and
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 as a source of income and jobs.
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, in spite of these benefits, it can
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 pose severe problems for the specific sites which are visited. There are various advantages of cultural
tourism
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 for the sites themselves.
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, they may benefit from greatly increased income, part of which may be spent,
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, on improving museums and galleries and on more frequent and more ambitious exhibitions. Even though these may be designed primarily to attract tourists, they are
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 available for local people to enjoy. A
further
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 advantage is that local authorities recognise the value of their sites, which they
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 invest money in.
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, monuments and historic buildings are restored and protected.
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, visitors learn
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 hand about the
ocuntry
a politically organized body of people under a single government
country
, whose culture and the customs are
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 understood and appreciated better by both tourists and local people.
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, cultural
tourism
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 has a number of drawbacks. The main one is that, in spite of protective measures being taken, the sheer number of visitors can cause serious damage to monuments
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 as ancient temples or cave paintings.
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 may mean that an important part of
country's national heritage
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the country's national heritage
 is lost.
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, in a region which the monuments are expected to generate income for the local economy, the site may be
spoilt
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spoiled
 by being surrounded by ugly hotels and other tourist facilities.
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, if too many tourists visit a site, it may
loose
fail to keep or to maintain; cease to have, either physically or in an abstract sense
lose
 its cultural significance within the local community.
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 is particularly the case for monuments which religious or social importance makes them a central part of community life. On the whole, while cultural
tourism
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 is generally beneficial, the problems which it causes can only be avoided with proper planning and sufficient investment in the protection and preservation of the sites which tourists visit.
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,
although
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 cultural
tourism
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 in general should not be discouraged, the number of tourists visiting certain sites should be restricted and tourists should be educated to respect them.

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