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Healthcare should not be provided for free regardless of a person's income. The health of an individual is in their own hands. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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This
 essay will discuss about
free healthcare system
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a free health care system
free health care system
 is needful or not. Most people think the healthcare must be not expensive because
eceryone
all people
everyone
 has the right to live healthy. There is a Mongolian wisdom "The illness came
by
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from
 wind suddenly, not
obviously
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obvious
" If people
had know
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had known
 they had
serious ailment base
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a serious ailment base
early
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earlier
, they would definitely take care themselves. But 80 percent of the world population does not have sufficient chance to protect from illness.
However
 person has
great wish
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a great wish
 to live happily, if he/she is sick it is almost impossible. There
are
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is
great amount
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a great amount
 of people who die,
as a result
 of
unsufficient
of a quantity not able to fulfill a need or requirement
insufficient
 money. On condition that hospitals do not take any fee, people will see their symptoms early and cured easily. So the proportion of heavy sick people would be decreased. On the other side many small and undeveloped countries have not enough money to run free hospitals. They earn money to buy hospital equipment and doctors` salary from
theair
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the air
 patients.
Also people
Accept comma addition
Also, people
 must be responsible to
theair
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the air
 own health and lives. It is not fair to waste population`s tax to another one.
In
addition there
Accept comma addition
addition, there
 is chance to happen strike whether Healthcare provided for free to everyone. Another reason is the earth is hard to exist when there
ara
a unit of surface area equal to 100 square meters
are
 as many as people. In
conclution
a position or opinion or judgment reached after consideration
conclusion
conciliation
consolation
, Healthcare should be provided free regardless of a person`s tax.
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