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It is important for all towns and cities to have large public spaces such as squares and parks. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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It is crucial for all metropolitan cities and towns to have some recreational facilities like parks and squares because of their numerous benefits. A number of arguments surround my opinion
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the upcoming paragraphs
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 and the foremost merit is that it is beneficial for the health of people because in morning time they can go for walking as well as in the evenings,
also
 older people can spend their free time with their loved ones
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and they can discuss about their daily happenings.
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, young people do
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a lot
lots
 of exercise in parks and gardens to keep their health fit and healthy
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otherwise
 if there is no park they glue with electronic gadgets like mobile phones and computers and many more.
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, little children get best place to play, they play with their friends in parks if any garden or square is not available for kids
then
 they use roads and streets for playing it can lead to serious incidents.
Moreover
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parks have some educational value too
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in schools
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students learn about
environment
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environmental
 protection in their studies and teachers can take their pupils to parks because students can see those pictures so lively which they see in their
school books
a book prepared for use in schools or colleges
schoolbooks
 and they know about
importance
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the importance
 and protection of
tress
a tall perennial woody plant having a main trunk and branches forming a distinct elevated crown; includes both gymnosperms and angiosperms
trees
 and flowers. In recapitulate, parks holds immense importance regarding education, health for people
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 every society
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so government should build parks in every city and town.
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