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It is too expensive to look after and repair old buildings. This money should be spent on building modern buildings instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#repair #buildings #money
Maintenance and looking after ancient buildings is too huge cost.
Although
 I agree it is too important to reforming ancient buildings, I believe that building modern architecture is vital too. On the one hand, it is important to countries
to keep
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keep
 and look after their ancient and historical buildings because
firstly they
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firstly, they
 are identity and culture of
country
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the country
 and it is important
to
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for
 maintenance and keeping them for people live now and
next
 generation
for example
 Persepolis is one of the historical and
architecture
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architectural
 feat in Iran. It was built many years ago by Korosh the
first
 king of Hakamnesh.
Secondly even
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Secondly, even
 though it is
to
to a degree exceeding normal or proper limits
too
 huge cost depending
money
 for ancient
buildings government
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buildings, government
building government
building building government
 can receive a lot of
money
 for people who visit the historical place. Society
grow
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grows
 economically they can attract a
lots
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lot
 of
tourist
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tourists
 to visit their countries.
On the other hand
,
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,
although
 I think government have to consider old building
,
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,
 it is important to build
modernplace
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modern place
 and spend
money
 to
builthem
. Because it makes
country
 seems progressive, developed, and advanced so it is essential for countries and it cause
country
 seems modern.
For example
 Debi have a lot of
present building
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the present building
 and attract many
tourist
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tourists
 from all of the word and
country
 looks
butiful
delighting the senses or exciting intellectual or emotional admiration
beautiful
pitiful
. And people live in modern houses Overall
,
Accept space
,
 I think paying
money
 to keep and repair ancient building is as important as spending
money
 on recent building so government should notice both ancient and modern
building
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buildings
.
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