It is too expensive to look after and repair old buildings. This money should be spent on building modern buildings instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Maintenance and looking after ancient buildings is too huge cost.
Although
I agree it is too important to reforming ancient buildings, I believe that building modern architecture is vital too. On the one hand, it is important to countries
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keep
to keep
and look after their ancient and historical buildings because
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firstly, they
firstly they
are identity and culture of
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the country
country
and it is important
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for
to
maintenance and keeping them for people live now and
next
generation
for example
Persepolis is one of the historical and
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architectural
architecture
feat in Iran. It was built many years ago by Korosh the
first
king of Hakamnesh.
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Secondly, even
Secondly even
though it is
to a degree exceeding normal or proper limits
too
to
huge cost depending
money
for ancient
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buildings, government
building government
building building government
buildings government
can receive a lot of
money
for people who visit the historical place. Society
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grows
grow
economically they can attract a
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lot
lots
of
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tourists
tourist
to visit their countries.
On the other hand
Accept space
,
,
although
I think government have to consider old building
Accept space
,
,
it is important to build
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modern place
modernplace
and spend
money
to
builthem
. Because it makes
country
seems progressive, developed, and advanced so it is essential for countries and it cause
country
seems modern.
For example
Debi have a lot of
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the present building
present building
and attract many
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tourists
tourist
from all of the word and
country
looks
delighting the senses or exciting intellectual or emotional admiration
beautiful
pitiful
butiful
. And people live in modern houses Overall
Accept space
,
,
I think paying
money
to keep and repair ancient building is as important as spending
money
on recent building so government should notice both ancient and modern
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buildings
building
.

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