The average standard of people's health is likely to be lower in the future than it is now. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

The
health
of
public
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the public
is
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has been
always a
debetble
open to doubt or debate
debatable
topic since long time.But now
it
it is
it's
become
serious consern
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a serious concern
serious concern
serious concerns
.Behind
this
so many factor
effect
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effects
like the people 's life style,
habbit
an established custom
habit
habits
, working style and so on.So
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
am strongly agree
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strongly agree
with people's
health
will
going
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go
down in the
future
.
First
of all, the main two
reason
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reasons
behind it are technology and
fastfood
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fast food
.
Nowadays teenager
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The nowadays teenager
A nowadays teenager
Nowadays teenagers
and working public become the tech-
addctive so
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addictive, so
addictive so
they love to buy
new gadget
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a new gadget
new gadgets
the new gadget
and they spend
lot
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lots
of their time on it and the result of it bad
eyesite
normal use of the faculty of vision
eyesight
.They have not more
interst
a sense of concern with and curiosity about someone or something
interest
interested
in playing outdoor sport so they become less active and weak.
Moreover it
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Moreover, it
is
also
make impact of the eating pattern.
Also
in many big
organization
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organizations
most of
employes
a worker who is hired to perform a job
employees
are working and living in sitting life style so it
aslo
in addition
also
effect on their
health
in
future
.In
addtion people
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addition, people
addition people
are prefer
readymade
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ready made
fastfood
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fast food
and they are not taking interest in home made food and
also
they are not learning the cooking skill. It will not only make the impact in their own
life but
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life, but
whole family 's
health
will come
in
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into
dangerous
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danger
.
In contrast
, many people
belive
accept as true; take to be true
believe
believed
that technology will help the improving the
health
of people.Because the many
company
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companies
develop the fitness app and gadget it may improve the
health
in
future
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the future
. In my
opnion
a personal belief or judgment that is not founded on proof or certainty
opinion
, mostly public
are using
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is using
this types
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this type
these types
of gadget for style-statement and show off. So wall of negative side is much taller
then
conjunction used in comparatives
than
positive. So
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
am sure it will impact very highly on public 's
health
in
future
. So we all have
take
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taken
care about
over use
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the overuse
overuse
of technology and prefer home made food.

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