The average standard of people's health is likely to be lower in the future than it is now. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

The
health
of
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the public
public
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has been
is
always a
open to doubt or debate
debatable
debetble
topic since long time.But now
it is
it's
it
become
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a serious concern
serious concern
serious concerns
serious consern
.Behind
this
so many factor
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effects
effect
like the people 's life style,
an established custom
habit
habits
habbit
, working style and so on.So
refers to the speaker or writer
I
i
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strongly agree
am strongly agree
with people's
health
will
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go
going
down in the
future
.
First
of all, the main two
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reasons
reason
behind it are technology and
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fast food
fastfood
.
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The nowadays teenager
A nowadays teenager
Nowadays teenagers
Nowadays teenager
and working public become the tech-
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addictive, so
addictive so
addctive so
they love to buy
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a new gadget
new gadgets
the new gadget
new gadget
and they spend
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lots
lot
of their time on it and the result of it bad
normal use of the faculty of vision
eyesight
eyesite
.They have not more
a sense of concern with and curiosity about someone or something
interest
interested
interst
in playing outdoor sport so they become less active and weak.
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Moreover, it
Moreover it
is
also
make impact of the eating pattern.
Also
in many big
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organizations
organization
most of
a worker who is hired to perform a job
employees
employes
are working and living in sitting life style so it
in addition
also
aslo
effect on their
health
in
future
.In
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addition, people
addition people
addtion people
are prefer
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ready made
readymade
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fast food
fastfood
and they are not taking interest in home made food and
also
they are not learning the cooking skill. It will not only make the impact in their own
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life, but
life but
whole family 's
health
will come
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into
in
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danger
dangerous
.
In contrast
, many people
accept as true; take to be true
believe
believed
belive
that technology will help the improving the
health
of people.Because the many
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companies
company
develop the fitness app and gadget it may improve the
health
in
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the future
future
. In my
a personal belief or judgment that is not founded on proof or certainty
opinion
opnion
, mostly public
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is using
are using
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this type
these types
this types
of gadget for style-statement and show off. So wall of negative side is much taller
conjunction used in comparatives
than
then
positive. So
refers to the speaker or writer
I
i
am sure it will impact very highly on public 's
health
in
future
. So we all have
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taken
take
care about
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the overuse
overuse
over use
of technology and prefer home made food.

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