The graph shows the percentage of male and female academic staff members across the faculties of a major university in 2012. Summarize the information by selecting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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how the academic

staff

percentages

in faculties, by

gender

, differed in 2012. As we can see in the

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that the

percentages

of different faculties like art, business, education, engineering, law, medicine, and science, have changed by

gender

in 2012. The academic

staff

percentages

in arts

faculty

in 2012, have not been stable between

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females

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and

male

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males

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. With

a

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reference

of

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the

graph

, we can see that

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female

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females

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increased to 55% and

male

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males

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decreased to 45%. When it comes to business

faculty

academic

staff

percentages

in 2012,

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descended to 35%

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male

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males

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remounted clearly to 65%. It's quite clear that education

faculty

academic

staff

percentages

in 2012, by

gender

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almost changed.

Female

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significantly jumped to 75%, but

male

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dropped to 25%. Regarding the given

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of engineering

faculty

. Academic

staff

percentages

, by

gender

in the same year

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totally different.

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Females

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felt

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to 15%, and

male

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males

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dramatically increased to 85%.

Aa

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we can see in the

graph

of law

faculty

, female academic

staff

percentages

declined to 40%

while

male

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males

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rose to 60%. Medicine

faculty

made no clear change between female and male academic

staff

percentages

in 2012. Both

around

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45%.

Finally

with the same reference to the

graph

. Science

faculty

female academic

staff

percentages

decreased to 35%

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when

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male

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gradually increased to 65%. We can sum up the

above mentioned

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date

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by saying that the academic

staff

percentages

, by

gender

, 2012. Had a lot of ups and downs between the faculties.