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The table data below shows the average band scores for students from different language groups taking the IELTS General Test in 2010.

The table data below shows the average band scores for students from different language groups taking the IELTS General Test in 2010.
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The given illustration represents the middle
band
 points in the participants
the
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 IELTS General Test by people of various language
group
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 in 2010.
Im
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In
 general, the table
decribes
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describes
 scores for all
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together with
 the
overall
 mark. As
it
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can be seen, the total medium
band
 grade of
German
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group
 is the highest and occupied 6.7 points.
In addition
,
this
group
 possessed the top
band
 score almost in all
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, with only one exception in
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 part, where they step back to the Malay
group
. The table data clearly shows that French language candidates are
at
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the
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second
 place with
overall
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the overall
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band
 -
6.5
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. Especially they depicted significantly higher results in
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 part in comparison with Indonesian and Malay groups, covering 6.5
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. Returning to the details, after French groups with
overall
 6.3 bands
was
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 Indonesian speaking groups, their
the
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highest point in
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 was at the Speaking part and maintained 6.7.
Likewise
, Malay
group
 candidates represented the lowest scores with
overall
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an overall
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band
6.4
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, and
this
 is the highest indicator than in
other
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the other
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 participants
group
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groups
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 in
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the Reading
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 section.
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