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Some people believe that written communication is much less powerful than face to face interaction when it comes to conveying a message. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statemant?

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It is argued by some people that written interaction is much less robust than
person
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 to
person
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communication
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, while others claim that written interaction is more powerful to transmit a topic. On the one hand,
face
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 to
face
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communication
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 can be the most easy and efficient
way
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to
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of
 conveying a
message
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 because
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way
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 is a natural
behviour
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
. People have used their
body
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 languages since he/she was born. According to
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Professor
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 Kane Witson, manager of
neurology department
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the neurology department
 at Cambridge University, people have some
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 all over the
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,
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language
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 is
body
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langueage
a systematic means of communicating by the use of sounds or conventional symbols
language
. If a
person
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 lives in Germany
afriad
make available or accessible, provide or furnish
offered
afford
 something, it will give a same reaction as a
person
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 living in Africa or other places. Because
amigdala
an almond-shaped neural structure in the anterior part of the temporal lobe of the cerebrum; intimately connected with the hypothalamus and the hippocampus and the cingulate gyrus; as part of the limbic system it plays an important role in motivation and emotional behavior
amygdala
, a part of our brain, controls our attitudes when people are in danger or when they are happy so that all people give same
body
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 reactions to
same situations
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the same situations
 and
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communication
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 style
doesn
mature female of mammals of which the male is called 'buck'
does
’ need words for understanding others. As can be predicted,
face
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 to
face
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communication
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 can be most efficient and easy
way
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 to transmit our
message
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 to other persons due to
body
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language
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.
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, sometimes, we need to ask
quiestion
an instance of questioning
questions
 about
spoken
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speaking
 topics so that many multinational companies spent a lot money to organize meetings.
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Participants
 can discuss topics and they can create new ideas at
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meetings
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meeting
. To demonstrate, in Amazon, the most profitable company in the Earth,
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 company spent 200 million USD for organizing meetings because people can easily ask and discuss about problems with their colleagues. If the mailing is adequate for
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, they would not spend mass money for
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 to
face
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communication
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 style.
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, sometimes, we cannot remember
some
one or some or every or all without specification
any
 knowledges. If we don’t take
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 information by mail or letters, we would not find them, in case
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writing, communication
writing communication
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 is the very useful
way
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 to transmit information to others due to
storeable
capable of being steered or directed
steerable
 type. To illustrate, in Turkey, researchers found a place.
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 place’s name is Gobeklitepe.
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 area was built
at
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in
 20.000 years ago.
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Surprisingly
, researchers found some pictures on the walls.
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 Picture includes milky
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 and
a round
in the area or vicinity
around
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world
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the world
.With
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message
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 from the previous generations, we can understand
a round
in the area or vicinity
around
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 theory had been known before we knew. Without doubt,
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 knowledge can be changed our history. If previous people didn’t write or
skretch
cause friction
scratch
sketch
, we would not learn their life and their knowledge levels.
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, we can organize our
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 before we send our
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 to people.
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message
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 can be very understandable and reach a lot of people. To demonstrate, Donald Trump, president of
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the USA
, prefer to share his
message
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with
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to
 Twitter. Twitter is a very reliable
communication
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 platform all over the
world
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 and it has billions of users. Donald Trump can easily inform others with his tweets. He can affect other governments’ economies with his messages. Unfortunately, he can use twitter like as a powerful weapon. In conclusion,
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 to
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communication
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 is more robust than written
communication
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 because without
body
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language
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,
communication
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 is not efficient and understandable.
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, we can discover
history
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the history
 without pictures or written documents. In
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days
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day
, technology is skyrocketing, we can
analyze
consider in detail and subject to an analysis in order to discover essential features or meaning
analyse
 historical items or bones and we can learn full of information about our history. Without doubt, Donald Trump
prefer
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prefers
 to written
communication
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 because he doesn’t use their
body
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language
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,
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,
very well.
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