Some people think that teenagers should concentrate on all subjects at school. Others believe that teenagers should focus on the subjects they are best at or they are more interested in. To what extent do you agree?

Studying a wide variety of subjects at school is instrumental for holistic growth and development of teenage students, who
are soon going
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is soon going
to face the real world. While some people argue that teenagers should get to choose the subjects of their choice, I believe that they should be introduced to different curriculum of study.
However
, the degree of
complexities
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the complexities
of these
curriculum
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curriculums
curricula
should be tailored to individual student's learning capacity. Fundamental
knowledge
of all subjects is crucial for innovation and advancing in any field of career chosen by students. Modern workforce is highly competitive and in order to advance and innovate in a specific job one has to combine
knowledge
from
extreme spectrum
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an extreme spectrum
the extreme spectrum
of subjects.
For
example many
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example, many
medical professionals with years and years of
knowledge
only about the workings of the human body are learning how make
creative
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creating
online videos to advance in their career as a healthcare provider. Another example would be
of
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by
a famous physician and
artist
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an artist
who combined his
knowledge
to create famous anatomical books used by medical students all around the world.
However
, not everyone has the cognitive capacity to learn complex and abstract concepts of so called difficult subjects. Studies have shown that I.Q is responsible towards the learning capability of an individual to move deeper into the intricacies of a subject matter.
Therefore
it is futile to expect all students to perform well in all advanced classes. These students when encouraged to pursue the subject of their choice tend to have higher self esteem and perform well in their career of their choice. In conclusion, learning should be tailored according to
ones
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one's
ability and interest. But the opportunity to learn and experience about all
speciality
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specialities
is only possible during school and it should not be missed.
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