Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion

There has been
untold number
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untold numbers
an untold number
of debates
amoung
in the middle of
among
various walks of life about the influence of
music
on people togetherness.
considering
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Considering
the above mentioned,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
totally agree that
this
is
music
which can gather people from various
culture
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cultures
together on
basis
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the basis
of some compelling reasons.
To begin
with, the main reason is
,
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,
music
is
some thing
an unspecified thing, agency, amount, etc.
something
that makes people feel
similar
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similarly
.
That is
to say
,
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,
sometime
music
is not
familier
well known or easily recognized
familiar
to
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with
your culture or language
,
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,
however
,
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,
the feeling that you get from
music
is likely similar to others.So
this
common sense
usually lead
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usually leads
to have more communication with other people.For
instanse
an occurrence of something
instance
instances
,
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,
new research in USA elucidates the fact that whenever people listen to
music
in
bar
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a bar
or
cafee
a small restaurant where drinks and snacks are sold
cafe
,
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,
whether it is well-known for them or not
,
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,
they communicate better with others rather than a
placr
a point located with respect to surface features of some region
place
pleasure
there is no
music
. Looking at the other reason
,
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,
music
can have
fundamental impact
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a fundamental impact
on people communication.
when
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When
some people listen to common
music
,
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,
it may lead to talk about the feeling about the song
.
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.
To put it in example
,
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,
the research about
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • universal language
  • evoke
  • connect
  • diverse audiences
  • cultural exchange
  • generational gaps
  • shared experiences
  • unifying force
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