Children can learn effectively by watching television. Therefore they should be encourage to watch television regularly at home and school. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

Some people believe children learn
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more effectively
more effective
by watching various
television
programs, and they
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should promote
should be promoted
should be promote
watching
television
more often.
However
, I disagree with
this
opinion as children learn successfully with real life experiences and spending a lot of
time
in watching
television
can hinder their social skills. Student learn more efficiently when they learn through practical experiences.
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The student
Student
will remember for
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a long time
long
time
if they are
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thinking
thought
in real life setting
then
watching a documentation about it. They can learn through exploring and discovering new ways to solve a problem.
For
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example, no
example no
one can learn how to ride a bicycle by watching a video about. They have to actually sit on one and try to do it. By increasing the number of
television
hours for children can hinder their
the act of meeting for social purposes
socializing
scoalizing
and problem solving skills. Children who
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watch
watches
more cartoons have often
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delayed
delays
in communication skills, as cartoons only have one-way interaction.
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A student
The student
Student
who spends
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an increasing amount
increasing amounts
increasing amount
of
time
watching
television
have high
(psychiatry) a relatively permanent state of worry and nervousness occurring in a variety of mental disorders, usually accompanied by compulsive behavior or attacks of panic
anxiety
anixty
and lack stress management. Research shows that students
the period of time that is happening now; any continuous stretch of time including the moment of speech
nowadays
now a days
suffer more from general
(psychiatry) a relatively permanent state of worry and nervousness occurring in a variety of mental disorders, usually accompanied by compulsive behavior or attacks of panic
anxiety
aniexty
disorder. In conclusion, I disagree that children should be
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encouraged
encourage
to spend more
time
watching
television
as it effects their socializing skills and watching more
television
is not the ideal way of promoting learning.

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