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37. People believe that teaching children at home is best for child's development while other think it is important to go to school. Discuss the advantages of both methods and provide your own opinion.

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It is a fact that our contemporary living communities have been more complex that those in the past;
therefore
, some parents prefer homeschooling for their children. Others believe that
school
education
 is much important and superior to homeschooling. The essay will discuss both benefits and presents my view that I support the latter.
To begin
 with, homeschooling has become popular in certain region worldwide.
Firstly
, it provides flexible schedules for children and their parents, which
also
 reduce stress for both due to elimination of peer pressure or routine
school
 schedules.
In addition
, homeschooling provides options for students to select learning content in terms of their personal interests and inborn gifts.
For example
, many famous Chinese athletes had homeschooling experiences because they could focus on taking training courses.
Finally
, homeschooling provides safer learning environments for children. They will have less chances to nurture bad habits
such
 as smoking, drinking or doing drugs because  they are supervised by their parents. 
On the other hand
, some parents believe that
school
education
 is a better option for their children.
Firstly
, curricula are systemic and profound because they are composed of experienced educators in terms of children's development stages.
Moreover
,
school
 environments provide opportunities for students to develop their skills
such
 as interpersonal interaction, communication, cooperation, public speech, etc.
Last
 but not the least, students at
school
 need to learn to obey the rules, to follow their daily agenda, and to organize their personal things.
As a result
,
school
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school, education
education
 will train students' capacities for their future post-secondary academic
education
 and professional careers in their later lives. In summary, I personally opine
school
education
 because it provides suitable learning contents for regular students.
Besides
, it provides mimic social atmospheres for students to navigate and cooperate with their peers and teachers.
This
 will enhance their personal capacities.
Although
 homeschooling is less stressful for students and parents, it is only suitable for certain students due to the above reasons.
Therefore
, in the current global societies,
school
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school, education
education
 are a major trend for ordinary students because of the above reasons.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Tailored learning
  • peer pressure
  • flexibility
  • instill values
  • socialization
  • communication skills
  • specialized facilities
  • extracurricular activities
  • diversity
  • structured environment
  • customized education
  • well-rounded education
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