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Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others belive that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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It is believed by some that, businesses, global academic knowledge and research in
sciences
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the sciences
 should be known to the world, but some people are of the view that the informative content provided by
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 advances could leak critical information to the world.
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 essay will discuss both critiques, stating my opinion in favour of the former view. On the one hand, informative content portrayed across the globe in various fields
have shown
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has shown
 to increase the intellectuals, the business-minded and scientists engaged in developing
newwer
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new
newer
 technologies. An
example
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 can be observed from the higher standard of scholars being developed by the vast variety of education available online. As another
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, motivational speakers and business tycoons publish innovative ideas in magazines.
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, knowledge in some areas of study circulated across countries could prove
devestating
making light of
devastating
 to the society as a whole. For an
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, the discovery of aliens has become a matter of concern amongst people and researchers foresight that an alien invasion might become a reality sometime in the near future. As a
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, the subject of cloning has seen much controversy and the recent approaches in creating a clone remained a topic of much criticism and disharmony. In conclusion, the viewpoint that awareness about the scientific investigations, corporate culture and the academia is a much relevant approach in my opinion.
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