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What are the possible causes of water pollution, and what effects does this have on animal life and human society?

#water #pollution #effects #life #society
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An essential element of the ecosystem is
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Water
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 pollution occurs when harmful chemicals or microorganisms are released into
water
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 bodies, which results in the degradation of animal and human’s life quality.  Undoubtedly, our precious aquatic resources are deteriorating rapidly for numerous reasons, and most of these reasons trace back to us.
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, one of our major contributions in
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 catastrophe, is the toxic industrial byproducts getting dumped by factories on a daily basis in a nearby river rather than disposing of the waste responsibly. Unarguably, compromised infrastructure might aggravate the situation even more, by leaking or draining intentionally sewage
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 into a nearby source of
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.
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, accidental oil spills by releasing a huge amount of liquid petroleum into the sea and rarely on land is considered a devastating environmental disaster on its own m.
Water
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 degradation has many obvious repercussions that we can’t overlook. Surprisingly, many fatal diseases are caused and transmitted by contaminated
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, cholera outbreaks in destitution communities, skin diseases and cancer. Unfortunately, not only human beings are affected, but each and every creature depending on
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 will suffer and die.
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 disrupting the whole food chain. Certain measures have to be taken if we want to survive
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 ordeal.
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, government officials must legislate laws that fine and strictly punish factory owners for violating environmental safety regulation.
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, Raising awareness concerning
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 pollution to prevent the exacerbation of
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 calamity and urging people to behave more responsibly. To sum up, if human beings do not relinquish the persistent attitude of carelessness and selfishness toward the others and themselves they won't survive
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 ordeal.

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