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Some people think that public libraries are no longer important, while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Nowadays, technologies have changed our way of reading and transmit knowledge. For
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a rational motive for a belief or action
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, part of the public opinion believes that public libraries are not necessary anymore, while others consider them still a very relevant tool of culture. On one hand, people, who think that public libraries are still important, are convinced that communities need places to meet, to share books and information as an instrument of education and culture.
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, if you take the example of small villages, public libraries have always represented the possibility to socialize and share opinions with other people.
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, especially in the past years, it was a necessary tool for school and institutions: pupils could find books to read, to study or to do research.
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, in many small villages, public libraries are still the best place for children to find books and start to love reading
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, with the modern technology and thanks to the internet, an increasing number of citizens believe that
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 places, financed by the government, are old-fashioned and a waste of money. From one side, everybody can read e-books, find them and any other relevant information on the internet. For
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 reason, some people think that public libraries are useless and that public funds should be used for better purposes,
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 as health care for the elderly or for increasing security against crime. In conclusion, part of the public opinion considers public libraries still necessary for the community as a place to meet and as an instrument of education and culture, while other citizens believe that modern technologies,
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 as internet and e-books, have made them less important.
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