Some people think that government is wasting money on the arts, and that this money could be spent elsewhere. To what extent do you agree with this view?

Some people think that
government
is wasting
money
on the arts, and that
this
money
could be spent elsewhere. To what extent do you agree with
this
view? Nowadays, People believe that
arts
Suggestion
the arts
can contribute to positive change in our life.
Therefore
, the
government
spent much
money
on
arts
Suggestion
the arts
. Many
travelers
a person who changes location
travellers
come to my country so that they will look at museums, theatres and traditional arts.
Also
, some arts influence positively toward children in any
ways
Accept comma addition
ways, such
such
as communications and
behaviors
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviours
. In my opinion, the
government
should spend
money
for the following reasons.
Firstly
,
Arts
Suggestion
the Arts
are the main parts of the tourism industry in many of the countries.
For instance
, Mongolian traditional arts are famous across the world. Because Mongolians have very interesting traditional music, instruments and crafts found nowhere else in the world.
Consequently
, many tourists come to see curiosity arts that can raise our country’s economy.
Secondly
, most of the children are being learnt art by their parents’ request. If children can learn traditional music, folk or any other arts in childhood, they will become more confident in themselves and competent communicating with others.
On the other hand
, Children studying art history that
help
Suggestion
helps
them to know about the history of
world
Suggestion
the world
. In conclusion, there are a number of reasons to say arts play an important role in our economy and education.
Therefore
, the
government
need to spend some
money
artists so as to develop
arts
Suggestion
the arts
.

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