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Being a celebrity - such as a movie star or professional athlete - brings problems as well as benefits. Do you think that being a celebrity has more benefits or drawbacks?

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The
film
industry
 in present
world
 has a great importance due to their beauty
,
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,
 acting
,
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,
 they are key role in giving the entertainment for the
society
 and it has the responsibility to teach moral and ethics
to
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of
 the
society
.
in
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In
 the controversy
,
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,
 the celebrates are focusing on their beauty and their wealth rather than the have moral stories for the
society
,
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,
this
 would lead to bad impacts on the youth in the
society
.
in
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In
 extend
,
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,
the
film
industry
 becoming the business to earn large amount of money with their movies of no ethics and morals,
this
 might show bad atmosphere for people in
present
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the present world
world
.
as
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As
 the
film
 celebrates are more focusing on the beauty and acting skills, as they are
using
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used
 as a weapon on the youth to attract towards the celebrates.In the present
world
, the
film
industry
 is mostly focusing on the A grade movies to the audience towards the celebrates to make
lump sum
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a lump sum
 of money with the single project.These
film
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films
 celebrates are exposing
there
of them or themselves
their
body
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bodies
to
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in
 public for drawing attention towards them and get popular person in the
film
industry
.
for
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For
 example
,
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,
in Indian
film
industry there
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industry, there
 are
lot
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lots
 of A grade movies like dirty picture,
kamasutra
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Kama sutra
kama sutra
 and many more.The motto of
this
movies
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movie
 that to draw the attention in the public
with out
in absence of
without
 having any
more ethics
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more ethical
. The
another
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
 aspect of having
bad impact
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a bad impact
 on the youth
,
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,
the
film
 celebrates are more focused on improving their wealth rather than their achievements in the their
life time
the period during which something is functional (as between birth and death)
lifetime
 career.
in
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In
present situation
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the present situation
,
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,
the
film
 celebrates are concentrating high remuneration in
short period
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a short period
 of time by committing to unsuccessful stories.
these
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These
 celebrates are less concern on their achievements in their work place.
in
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In
 wrapping up the above essay
,
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,
 the films in present market are showing bad effect on the
society
.
so
to a very great extent or degree
So
 the
film
 has to concentrate more on the ethical stories to the teach the morals
to
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of
 the
society
,
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,
so we can reduce the crimes which are
on going
currently happening
ongoing
 in the present
world
.

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  • duality
  • acknowledged
  • accrue
  • endorsements
  • sponsorships
  • influential
  • recognition
  • admiration
  • privileged
  • exclusive
  • luxury
  • privacy invasion
  • paparazzi
  • scrutiny
  • pressure
  • exploitation
  • unscrupulous
  • mental health issues
  • public image
  • perks
  • impact
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