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Community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes. To what extent do you agree.

#community #service #part #school #programmes
Socializing is very important in today's world. In the high schools programmes,
community
 services should be made mandatory. I totally agree with
this
 statement. Through academy we can educate the students about the importance of helping others. In
further
 paragraphs, I intend to describe my view points. To commence with, the students learn many new skills from participating in programmes held in schools. In
curriculum
Accept comma addition
curriculum, community
community
 services should be added to teach children about volunteering for social cause. Through which they get to know the current environment of the place they are living and problems that each individuals are facing in their day to day lives. By
such
 services they develop teamwork, communication skills, the value of money and many more.
Secondly
, a lot amount of money is spent on
school
 programmes, so by adding
community
 services in can benefit the organization and the person who is seeking help.
For instance
, many schools distribute winter wears to beggars and poor people to help them to survive in winter. Some
school
 even take the students to blind
school
, old age homes and shares gifts to all people, which develops a sense of pride and satisfaction in children's life.
Moreover
, by learning
such
 skills they
make
Suggestion
will make
 the habits of helping others in the future and even outside the
school
 premises they get inspired to conduct
such
 services for needy people. In the conclusion, I would like to say that, high schools are a great platform to organise
community
 services. From schools, students and parents can learn about
such
 services as well as motivated to participate in
such
 events.

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