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Some people believe that children will have a bright future if they are always rewarded by their parents and teachers when they behave well. However, other people argue that if the children misbehave, they should receive punishment so that they can become qualified citizens. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Everyone makes important decisions, some of these decisions are bigger than others, but all of these can potentially have a big impact. It can be about buying a house, starting a family or something relatively smaller
such
 as buying the new iPhone. Everyone deals with making significant decisions differently, they ask friends or family for advice or they ask their partner, while other people make these decisions on their own. For me
personally it
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personally, it
 depends on the subject the
decision
 will be made about in how to approach
this
. The more significant the
decision
, the bigger the chance I would ask advice to friends and family. If the
decision
 is of lesser importance than the chances are bigger that I would make the
decision
 on my own.
For example
, buying a new mobile phone, which can have an impact on my financial status, will be a
decision
 I will make on my own. While when I bought a house, I gathered as much
advise
a proposal for an appropriate course of action
advice
 as possible from different family members and friends. But sometimes the significance of a
decision
 is so big, but
also
 so personal, that I would still decide to make the
decision
 without asking for guidance. For me, personal choices
such
 like an abortion, will be decided by myself without the guidance or directions from other people. As
this
 is something, I have to carry with me for the rest of my
live
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life
, while for other people
this
was
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has been
 just a brief commotion that happened.
Hence
, it is not possible to make a strict distinction for when to ask directions from friends and family and when you do not need their guidance. Both the significance and the personality of the
decision
 are leading factors to decide to ask for advice or not.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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