he environment problem facing today's world are so great that there is little ordinary people can do to improve the situation. Government and large companies should responsible for the deducing the amount of damage being done to the environment. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays it is hard to catch up with technology and development. Young
people
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develop too fast today and it is hard for
parents
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to catch up. Personally, I agree with the statement that today young
people
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make their own
decisions
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and do not depend on their
parents
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as it was in the past. I feel that way for two reasons which I will explore in my essay.
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with,
due to
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developed technologies and smart gadgets
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are way too advanced. Young
people
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are able to solve problems more easily than their
parents
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.
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, they become more independent and open-minded from a very young age. The advent of the Internet made a huge gap between generations and seized
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for youth to solve their problems on their own. For example, when I was in University my
parents
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decided what I should study, where and how. They went with me to apply for classes, to meet
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and to decide what would be more beneficial for me.
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, nowadays, my
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son
made
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his own
decisions
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about his major and
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everything by himself. Everything was done
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online
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and he never needed my assistance or help.
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, our children learn in school how to be free and independent from
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very young age. They are allowed to
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their own
decisions
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and be responsible for mistakes they have
done
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.
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, my
20 years old
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20-year-old
nephew decided to rent an apartment and live alone without his
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. At
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his
parents
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got
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surprised and were very upset about his decision.
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, they felt that he was mature enough to manage his life and was totally able to take care
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himself.
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, his relationship with
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became much better, he had more time to study and relax in the way he wanted.
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contrary
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, 10 years ago when I was young I couldn't
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even
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to live
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alone and
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be
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able to live without parental custody.
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, I think that nowadays young
people
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are more independent and free than in the past.
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because technology is accessible from the very young
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and it helps them to become more free from
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control and become more freethinking.
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, youth learn how to become adult from school
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be ready for life and be responsible for making their own
decisions
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.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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