Many people believe that educational standards have declined in recent times, particularly in the areas of literacy and numeracy. Discuss the causes of this problem and offer some possible solutions to it.

Nowadays it is hard to catch up with technology and development. Young people develop too fast today and it is hard for parents to catch up. Personally, I agree with the statement that today young people make their own decisions and do not depend on their parents as it was in the past. I feel that way for two reasons which I will explore in my essay.
To begin
with, due to developed technologies and smart gadgets adolescent are way too advanced. Young people are able to solve problems more easily than their parents.
As a result
, they become more independent and open-minded from a very young age. The advent of the Internet made a huge gap between generations and seized opportunity for youth to solve their problems on their own.
For example
, when I was in University my parents decided what I should study, where and how. They went with me to apply for classes, to meet
councilors
a member of a council
councillors
and to decide what would be more beneficial for me. In contrary, nowadays, my seventeen years old son made his own decisions about his major and did everything by himself. Everything was done on-line and he never needed my assistance or help.
Secondly
, our children learn in school how to be free and independent from the very young age. They are allowed to
made
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make
their own decisions and be responsible for
mistakes
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the mistakes
they have done.
For instance
, my 20
years
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year
old nephew decided to rent an apartment and live alone without his parents. At
first
his parents got surprised and were very upset about his decision.
However
, they felt that he was mature enough to manage his life and was totally able to take care about himself.
As a result
, his relationship with parents became much better, he had more time to study and relax in the way he wanted. In contrary, 10 years ago when I was young I couldn't
had
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have
even
imagine
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imagined
to live alone and be able to live without parental custody. Overall, I think that nowadays young people are more independent and free than in the past.
That is
because technology is accessible from the very young ages and it helps them to become more free from parent's control and become more
freethinking
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free thinking
.
Also
, youth learn how to become adult from school and be ready for life and be responsible for making their own decisions.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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