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Some people feel that global warming should be dealt with by governments. Others feel that it is the responsibility of individuals in society to solve the problem. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

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Global warming is changing the world that we live in. From wildfires to flood to
frequent devastating
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frequent, devastating
 hurricanes, there is no doubt that human activities have lead to global warming.
Time
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The time
 has come to take responsibility by both the government and the individuals to combat
this
 climate change. In my opinion, governments are more effective in taking drastic decisions to fight
this
. Authorities of
countries
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the countries
 have more resources and power, they can make policies and impose law to combat global warming in large scale. These policies
also
 enable the citizens to make astute consumer choices.
For example
, massive adoption of the electric cars and use of bicycles in
Nordic countries
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the Nordic countries
 can be attributed towards the government's decision to make tax breaks on these products, whereas
increased tax
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the increased tax
 on fossil fuel derived products discourage consumers from buying vehicles that run on these fuels.
Although
 the governments can impose
unlimited amount
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an unlimited amount
 of laws, educate the consumers, make
policies
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policies, however
however
 it is the individual's choice that can help against global warming. But how can a single person taking responsibility can change the world? Take Greta Thunberg, the Swedish teen who captured many's attention towards the need of the future generation. She has made many to take notice on how as an individual we can make choices to reduce our carbon footprint. In conclusion, climate change can only be combated when each individual understands their responsibility and acts towards them. But it is the government that can help its citizens by making it easier for them to make intelligent choices.
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