Some people believe that the goverment sholud take care of old people and provide financial support after they retire. Others say individuals should save during their working years to fund their retirement. What is your opinion? Is it a postive or negative development?

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fast changing modern era, every age- group need certain facilities for their survival.

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half part of the population believes that after retirement people should get support from the government, the other part thinks just opposite to it, they want every individual must save money for the future when they are working. I will put shine on both the sides. In my opinion, it is important for the society and law take care of old people. To embark with, there are several reasons why some masses holding a view in against of providing facilities like financial help for older people.

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of all, the government can introduce a more development project which helps to improve the country's economy and growth

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of giving benefiting services to retired people.

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, latest studies prove that many nations ban these facilities after retirement and focuses more on construction on developing valuable public projects.

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, it is seen that sometimes relatives or others cheat on retired people to get money for their service.

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is why some people may not get these benefits.

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, nowadays survival becomes relatively difficult due to a lot of competition in every field.

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and foremost, after a certain age, people lost their physical power to perform labour work

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as worker in factory and driver etc.. So, in

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situation they need support financially for the basic needs of human beings

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home, footwear, clothes, and foot etc.

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, in toady's world, there are some sons and daughters who leave their parents alone, for them ministry needs to build more old- age home where they get proper basic needs and take care. Even the rapidly rising cost of living and food item adversely effect retired people who do not have adequate savings. To encapsulate the whole notion, I gather that retired people contribute their life in the development of society.

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retirement, it's society's and governance duty to take care of these people and ensure their better survival.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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338 words

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