The internet has transformed the way information is transformed and consumed, but it has also created problems that did not exist before. What are the most serious problems associated with internet and what solutions can you suggest?

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An enormous number
Enormous number
of people believe that the
internet
has been imposing people to give and take an
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informed
information
. Surprisingly, there are
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a large number
large number
of negative
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impacts
impact
for the human being.
However
, the society can take steps to address
such
drawbacks. These problems and solutions will be obviously explained in paragraphs below. Surfing in the
internet
is a phenomenon that brings
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greater
great
convenience and efficiency. But, there are some
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potential
potensial
risks that presented by
this
phenomenon.
Firstly
, social media involves personal information that most people enable to see. If the user carelessness, anyone can have access to that information.
Secondly
, it is obvious that there is a sharp rise in the number of cyber crimes. More and more
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severe
ciber
crimes
such
as human selling and prostitutions are committed via the
internet
. It is well-known as
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cover
severe
ciber
crime,
for example
, recently there is
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an
a
accident that someone was hacked a billboard to show unpleasant content in south Jakarta.
Finally
, an
internet
-addicted person tend to be isolated, self-
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centred
centered
and unsociable. They have no much time to make a face-to-face communication. To answer the problem in previous part, there are three
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solutions
sollutions
that might solve the problems. From
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the government side
government side
, the authority can make a regulation to inhibit demerit of
this
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struggle
strugle
condition like a rule that give maximum punishment to suspect of
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severe
ciber
crime.
Next
, the drawback of
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the internet
internet
can be reduced by combination between government and technology. It could be a
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centre
center
office that authority possessed. It can inspect the user that
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potential
potentional
to do an illegal movement
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in
of
on
the virtual world. But
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a part
apart
of previous
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solutions
sollutions
, education is a vital aspect to minimize the disastrous effect of
internet
. People that
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use
are using
using
internet
have to know what the benefits of
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the internet
internet
that can help and what the drawbacks that can
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degrade
degradate
their life. To recapitulate, government, technology and education have
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an essential role
essential roles
essential role
to deal with decreasing effect of using
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the internet
internet
.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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