The internet has transformed the way information is transformed and consumed, but it has also created problems that did not exist before. What are the most serious problems associated with internet and what solutions can you suggest?

Enormous number
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An enormous number
of people believe that the
internet
has been imposing people to give and take an
information
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informed
. Surprisingly, there are
large number
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a large number
of negative
impact
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impacts
for the human being.
However
, the society can take steps to address
such
drawbacks. These problems and solutions will be obviously explained in paragraphs below. Surfing in the
internet
is a phenomenon that brings
great
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greater
convenience and efficiency. But, there are some
potensial
existing in possibility
potential
risks that presented by
this
phenomenon.
Firstly
, social media involves personal information that most people enable to see. If the user carelessness, anyone can have access to that information.
Secondly
, it is obvious that there is a sharp rise in the number of cyber crimes. More and more
ciber
intensely or extremely bad or unpleasant in degree or quality
severe
crimes
such
as human selling and prostitutions are committed via the
internet
. It is well-known as
ciber
provide with a covering or cause to be covered
cover
severe
crime,
for example
, recently there is
a
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an
accident that someone was hacked a billboard to show unpleasant content in south Jakarta.
Finally
, an
internet
-addicted person tend to be isolated, self-
centered
being or placed in the center
centred
and unsociable. They have no much time to make a face-to-face communication. To answer the problem in previous part, there are three
sollutions
a homogeneous mixture of two or more substances; frequently (but not necessarily) a liquid solution
solutions
that might solve the problems. From
government side
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the government side
, the authority can make a regulation to inhibit demerit of
this
strugle
an energetic attempt to achieve something
struggle
condition like a rule that give maximum punishment to suspect of
ciber
intensely or extremely bad or unpleasant in degree or quality
severe
crime.
Next
, the drawback of
internet
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the internet
can be reduced by combination between government and technology. It could be a
center
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
office that authority possessed. It can inspect the user that
potentional
existing in possibility
potential
to do an illegal movement
on
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in
of
the virtual world. But
apart
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a part
of previous
sollutions
a homogeneous mixture of two or more substances; frequently (but not necessarily) a liquid solution
solutions
, education is a vital aspect to minimize the disastrous effect of
internet
. People that
using
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use
are using
internet
have to know what the benefits of
internet
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the internet
that can help and what the drawbacks that can
degradate
reduce the level of land, as by erosion
degrade
their life. To recapitulate, government, technology and education have
essential role
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an essential role
essential roles
to deal with decreasing effect of using
internet
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the internet
.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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