Some people think that it is more beneficial to take part in sports which are played in teams, like football, while other people think that taking part in individual sports, like tennis or swimming, is better. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

For some people, play a
team
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sports, namely
sport namely
sport sport namely
sports namely
football is more advantageous.
However
,
plural of other; the people or things not already mentioned
others
other
consider being a
player
of individual games
such
as tennis provides more benefits. In my perspective, a
game
played by individual is comparatively viable On the one side some people consider that individual
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sports, for
sports for
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example, tennis
example tennis
are helpful in learning a new
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skill
skills
. In detail, when
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a player
the player
player
gets involved in
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this game
these games
these
game
, faces many challenges, to which as he
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overcomes
overcome
, attain a good practical skill and
lastly
become expert in it. Another considerable point is that these types of
game
build confidence.
In other words
, when
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a player
player
wins the
game
, feel
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a sense
sense
of accomplishment which improves his confidence.
Consequently
, he plays more enthusiastically
next
time.
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At
On
the
second
time, other people and I understand that participate in
team
sports is beneficial because they increase cooperation and sense of community.
In other words
, while playing
team
sports, all
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players
player
develop cooperation
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with
in
them which need to be to remain connected with their
team
for leading the
game
. As a result, they become more cooperative. Another considerable point is that it improves communication skills. In detail, because of being part of a
team
,
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players
a player
player
exchange many messages to each other which develops adequate communication skills and
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the ability
ability
able
to understand each other with
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a better way
better ways
better way
. To conclude,
although
individual games are helpful for players in learning new skills, I believe that
team
sports make to them more cooperative as well as confident which are required for life.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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