A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children's sports team for two years or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public. Write a letter to the company. In your letter: • describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team • summarise the benefits of paying for the concerts • say how you think the company should spend the money
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Dear Sir,
I hope
this
letter finds you well. I am Nezzy and I have been residing in this
local area for many years now. I would like to give you my feedback upon
the recent matter.
Change preposition
on
Firstly
, for your information
our local children's sports team has been doing very well for the past couple of years. They have been training very hard and are very dedicated Add a comma
information,
with
their Change preposition
to
practises
. Replace the word
practices
In addition
, they have a remarkable coach to train and motivates
them. If the sponsorship Correct subject-verb agreement
motivate
been
given to them, Add a missing verb
had been
this
would definitely boost their morale to compete for the regional. Furthermore
, they can get new equipments
to enhance their practises. I am certain Change the wording
equipment
types of equipment
pieces of equipment
this
can be very beneficial for our name and reputation.
On the other hand
, sponsoring the concerts has their
own benefits. Not only we can attract people to come to our place but we can Correct pronoun usage
its
also
create a charity based
concert to gain funds for Add a hyphen
charity-based
good
cause.
In conclusion, both of these carry their own benefits. Correct article usage
a good
However
, I am more inclined that you would give the sponsorship to our local children's sports team for the aforementioned reasons.
Thank you.
Kind regards,
NezzySubmitted by Nezzy on
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