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With the latest technological advancements, dating is now possible online. Would you recommend online dating for your single friends? What are the advantages and disadvantages of online dating? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.

It is quite common for
younger
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 generation nowadays to find a date via online sources. Thanks to the technology that made it possible. These online websites are sophisticated and intelligent enough to run through millions of
profiles
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 in their database and can match like-minded
singles
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 to provide suggestions for dating. I would certainly recommend
singles
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 in my friends
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to find their
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 through these online portals. Well, there are certain merits and demerits of
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 trend;
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, I would certainly recommend finding a match online. On the one hand, there are numerous
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 websites mushrooming every day, and not all of them are genuine. People who try to find their match via these fake portals will end up losing their money and valuable time.
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, one should choose a reputed online dating service to avoid disappointment.
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 to that, most people lie in their
profiles
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 just to attract eligible
singles
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. An interesting article published recently in a prominent newspaper stated that more than eighty
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 of
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online websites are not legitimate and added that at least fifty
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 of
profiles
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 are full of lies. Irrespective of
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, people are smart enough to bypass all these con artists and will be able to find genuine partners. On the advantageous side, web dating services portray a plethora of features including profile background checking, displaying profile pictures,
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and online
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 questionnaires to make
match making
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 easier and
accurate
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more accurate
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. These features will ensure that the member
profiles
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 are genuine to a large extent and the chances of getting cheated are quite minimal.
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, www.asiadating.com released a report to showcase their success rate in arranging the perfect match between
singles
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 in the year 2007. It shows that more than eighty
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 of the matches their system made
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turned out to be successful.
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,
singles
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find
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who find
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 their Soulmates via genuine online channels have more chances of finding their true partners.
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, in spite of some drawbacks finding a date through the
internet
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 is advantageous for
singles
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.
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, I would recommend
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 to my friends without hesitation.

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task achievement
Consider adding more specific examples and elaborating on your points to strengthen your argumentation, especially in the disadvantages section.
coherence and cohesion
Try to use more varied cohesive devices to enhance the flow of your writing and make clear connections between your ideas.
task achievement
You provided a clear recommendation regarding online dating and presented both advantages and disadvantages succinctly, which is commendable.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a logical structure with a clear introduction, body, and conclusion, making it easy to follow your thoughts.
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