Scientists and technology experts seem to be more valued by modern society than musicians and artists. To what extent do you agree?

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Some people believe that to relish more success and secured life, it is always a better option to choose science and technical streams. On the other side many people feel it is passionate to get indulge in an art career. I strongly feel that if we are doing anything with full focus and passion, we can achieve our goal which will not only provide us financial security but

also

lots of happiness and satisfaction.

Firstly

, in the

today

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today's

world, people are highly educated, they never judge anyone on the basis of one

factors

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factor

either intelligence or great sense of

humor

a message whose ingenuity or verbal skill or incongruity has the power to evoke laughter

humour

. People love to have the complete package; they give equal importance to the health and to the entertainment as well. If a health expert is not very smart to prescribe well or he is not experienced, people will never approach, only because he or she is having a degree. They could

also

face the deficiency of money;

similarly

, if a person is not having great skills to impress

other

plural of other; the people or things not already mentioned

others

with their voice or with their art, nobody is going to approach them for their entertainment. People will pay only to those persons who will serve them efficiently.

Secondly

, every field needs more time, effort and money. It is not always easy to become a technical expert or a musician. The person who will work more on their skills and actions, will

ultimate

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ultimately

become more efficient.

For example

, if a doctor is not practicing after getting his degree, he will get obsolete very soon as his skills are not well polished. In

this

modern world, many

musician

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musicians

are more in demand than doctor or technical experts, because of their soothe voice and they are getting paid well.

Moreover

, people feel if

doctor

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a doctor

the doctor

are

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crucial for their physical wellness, they

also

need musicians to relax their mind and get entertained, which is highly important for

this

rush lifestyle. In conclusion, people are in the need of everything not only technology or entertainment. They will pay happily to those persons who will serve well either for their physical needs or mental needs.

Therefore

, we cannot say people who are educated will get more pay. They need to be great in their own field to get valuable payment.

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Scientists and technology experts seem to be more valued by modern society than musicians and artists. To what extent do you agree?

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As countries develop, their populations tend to live individually or in small family units. What are the causes of this trend and what are the effects on society？

in many countries today, if people want to find a job , they have to move away from their friends and their families. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is not fair. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

Government investment in the arts, such as music and theatre, is a waste of money. Governments must invest this money in public services instead. To what extend do you agree with this statement?