Scientists and technology experts seem to be more valued by modern society than musicians and artists. To what extent do you agree?

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Some people believe that to relish more success and secured life, it is always a better option to choose science and technical streams. On the other side many people feel it is passionate to get indulge in an art career. I strongly feel that if we are doing anything with full focus and passion, we can achieve our goal which will not only provide us financial security but

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lots of happiness and satisfaction.

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, in the

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today's

world, people are highly educated, they never judge anyone on the basis of one

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either intelligence or great sense of

humor

a message whose ingenuity or verbal skill or incongruity has the power to evoke laughter

humour

. People love to have the complete package; they give equal importance to the health and to the entertainment as well. If a health expert is not very smart to prescribe well or he is not experienced, people will never approach, only because he or she is having a degree. They could

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face the deficiency of money;

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, if a person is not having great skills to impress

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plural of other; the people or things not already mentioned

others

with their voice or with their art, nobody is going to approach them for their entertainment. People will pay only to those persons who will serve them efficiently.

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, every field needs more time, effort and money. It is not always easy to become a technical expert or a musician. The person who will work more on their skills and actions, will

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ultimately

become more efficient.

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, if a doctor is not practicing after getting his degree, he will get obsolete very soon as his skills are not well polished. In

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modern world, many

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musicians

are more in demand than doctor or technical experts, because of their soothe voice and they are getting paid well.

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, people feel if

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a doctor

the doctor

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crucial for their physical wellness, they

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need musicians to relax their mind and get entertained, which is highly important for

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rush lifestyle. In conclusion, people are in the need of everything not only technology or entertainment. They will pay happily to those persons who will serve well either for their physical needs or mental needs.

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, we cannot say people who are educated will get more pay. They need to be great in their own field to get valuable payment.

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modern society
scientists
technology experts
musicians
artists
reliance
scientific advancements
practical benefits
driving economic growth
daily lives
culture
human emotions
express ideas
provoke thought
spiritual well-being
emotional well-being
preserving cultural heritage
subjective nature
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Scientists and technology experts seem to be more valued by modern society than musicians and artists. To what extent do you agree?

Fully explain your ideas

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Beside a lot of advantages, some people believe that the Internet creates many problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Write at least 250 words

Nowadays, some older people choose to live in the retirement communities with other people, rather than living with their adult children. Is it a positive or negative development?

The leaders or directors of organizations are often elderly people. However some say that young people can also take the lead of organisations or companies. To what extend do you agree or disagree?