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Creative artists should always be given the freedom to express their own ideas (in words, pictures, music or film) in whichever way they wish. There should be no government restrictions on what they do. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion.

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Delivering a message to the society would be a dream for a many
individuals but
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individuals, but
 due to the interference of
goverment
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
, a group of innovative people
find
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finds
 it difficult to establish their personal views. On the one hand, it is obvious that most of the governments are keen on promoting national unity among their nation, but movies or songs are a vital platform for a person to trier cultural clashes within the people. To be precise, an
indivigual
a human being
individual
 part of a particular
religon
a strong belief in a supernatural power or powers that control human destiny
religion
 or culture with hate on other
religons
a strong belief in a supernatural power or powers that control human destiny
religions
religion
 will generate media that directly discriminates other cultures and eventually
this
 would wreak havoc upon the residents of nations.
Moreover
, as the materials are generated by the talented artists are viewed by members of all groups, it is essential for the authorities of the country to observe and place barriers according to their content.
For example
, contents like porn, sexual violence and graphic contents are factors that play an important role
on
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in
development
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the development
 of today’s youth.
In contrast
, many citizens of the state are not aware of the flaws that goes within the administration of the country.
In other words
, a part of the community will be concerned with alerting the local people regarding the political strategies through images or video
clips but,
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clips, but
 the involvement of a nation’s authority would prevent
these
denotes a person or thing
this
 from occurring.
Therefore
, some inhabitants are finding it difficult to share their views due to the fear they have in their local administrations. In conclusion, it will be
benefical
promoting or enhancing well-being
beneficial
 if
population
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the population
 is allowed to display their ideas without any obstacles, but when considering the advancement of the nation and ensuring the peace among, the people It is a must to place restrictions.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Freedom of expression
  • Censorship
  • Artistic integrity
  • Cultural identity
  • Social responsibility
  • Public order
  • Discrimination
  • Hate speech
  • Self-regulation
  • Government intervention
  • Vulnerable groups
  • Creativity
  • Democracy
  • Fundamental right
  • Moral obligation
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