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Creative artists should always be given the freedom to express their own ideas (in words, pictures, music or film) in whichever way they wish. There should be no government restrictions on what they do. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion.

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It is generally accepted that creativity should come along with no restrictions, even by government;
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, reasonably, the freedom should be given to creative artists. Put differently, artists should have the right to express their own ideas in whatever ways they like. Undoubtedly, creativity to a certain extent means no confines, and without confines, creative artists could produce attractive, original
art works
photographs or other visual representations in a printed publication
artworks
 in the ways they prefer, and in that way their work could convey all their ideas effectively. “The Reader”, adapted into a movie from a book and both are exciting, is a perfect example best illustrated the importance of the "on restriction" for artists.
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, understandingly, only with
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 no-restriction can the world become a better civilized one, in which people could express their thoughts in numerous ways freely. Provided that artists can say their ideas in whatever way they wish, the diversity of the cultures and spirits will certainly boom.
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, we can elevate our physiological states as well as enjoy feasts in
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the physical lives
 like what Avatar brought to us.
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, not all the good will bring good results. For one thing, some people can create ideas which are essentially wrong. An example of wrong ideas could be the disabled are doomed in lower class and should be discriminated.
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, someone adapts them into a film with special effects.
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, it may prevail among
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people, including
 children who are easily accepted these wrong thoughts as norms. Move horribly, a few people might utilize the no-restriction regulations to spread anti-government ideas in
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favorable
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 ways, which would probably damage the stability of a society. These aspects are better expelled from the no-restriction zone. All in all, I think government restrictions of ways artists could use should diminish to some extent, but not completely. There are indeed some areas that need regulations. With the accurate circumference of restriction, I believe the world will become more civilized, cultures will diversify, and our lives will be enriched.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Freedom of expression
  • Censorship
  • Artistic integrity
  • Cultural identity
  • Social responsibility
  • Public order
  • Discrimination
  • Hate speech
  • Self-regulation
  • Government intervention
  • Vulnerable groups
  • Creativity
  • Democracy
  • Fundamental right
  • Moral obligation
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