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Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The graph
represent
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represents
 the percentage of male and female teachers in seven different faculties in 2012. The biggest amount of male teachers was at
engineering department whereas
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the engineering department, whereas
the engineering department whereas
 education was occupied by women: approximately 85 and 75 %
consequently
. We could notice a trend of male dominance in the field of exact sciences: at engineering, science and business the marks didn’t drop
under
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below
 60%. Less
dramatical
in a very impressive manner
dramatically
dramatic
grammatical
 differences
was
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were
 in the fields of medicine - the proportion was almost equal; while in
arts
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the arts
 and low the differences fluctuated around 10-20%. Still, Liberal arts
was
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were
 more “female”. In general all the faculties showed different levels of gender inequality in terms of academic staff. In
general by
Accept comma addition
general, by
 preliminary calculations men is considerably more than women
at
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in
of
academic teaching profession
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the academic teaching profession
: they dominated in four professions, and had
significant presence
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a significant presence
 at the rest three categories.

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