Too much attention is paid to and too much money is spent on keeping pets, while people throughout the world are starving. - Discuss the arguments for and against keeping pets. - To what extent do you agree?

These days, pets seem to attract more and more attention and much money from people. There is nothing to discuss if it does not have
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any
some
debate about
this
problem. Some say
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Pets
pets
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are taken
have taken
take
are taking
is taken
care too much at both physically and mentally aspects whilst starvation is
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Happening
happening
all around the world. In
this
essay, I will look at both sides of the argument
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And
and
give my opinion. On the one hand, keeping pets have
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benefited
benefit
in many ways.
Firstly
, to their owners, pets
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Bring
bring
a lot of fun and help people reduce stress.
Secondly
, to the community, create a
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New
new
job market
such
as selling pets’ accessories and food.
This
is a potential environment
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For
for
everyone who
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wants
want
to earn more money.
Lastly
, to the
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poets
pets
themselves, food and
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Others
others
like wash, toys are always available for them.
On the other hand
, there are still many disadvantages. If the owners do not take care of
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Their
their
pets carefully, they can go out and bite neighbours,
this
is the most dangerous thing
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Because
because
some pets can cause serious diseases. Another drawback is that pets often lack of
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Freedom
freedom
and survival skills. One more thing, in developed countries as Japan, America
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Domestic
Dosmetic
dosmetic
animals are given better food to eat than poor people and
that is
the reason why
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Some
some
against keeping pets. In my opinion, keeping pets bring people
such
many good things, it
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teaches
touches
teach
teachs
us
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Responsibility
responsibility
, kindness and attentiveness. But people
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should get
should got
another think coming
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Before
before
spending lots of money on a pet while people over the world are dying of hunger. In their hard time, we ought to open our heart and give them the best things we could give.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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