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Some people believe that people who do physical work should be paid on par with the people who have high Level degree. Do you agree or disagree?

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Physical
work
 involves utilizing one’s body strength to accomplish a task. Most of the blue collar jobs
such
 as carpentry, masonry, plumbing involve a lot of physical
work
.
Although
 these jobs involve a lot of physical
work
, they
also
 require cognitive thinking
such
 as problem solving in order to accomplish the given task. It is my opinion that people who perform physical
work
 for a living should
also
 be
paid the same on
Suggestion
paid on the same
 par with the people who possess
university degree
Suggestion
a university degree
. A country’s
economy
 is dependent on its infrastructure
such
 as roads, railways and airports. The Infrastructure sector is reliant on the blue collar
laborers
someone who works with their hands; someone engaged in manual labor
labourers
, who perform physical
work
, in order to lay down roads, build cities and create a vibrant
economy
. Physical workers are the backbone of any developing
economy
 as their skills are
also
 required in driving the industries
such
 as manufacturing, logistics and automobile. A perfect example of a country that utilized its brute manpower to improve its
economy
 and remove millions of people from abject poverty is China. In order to ensure that they meet their economic targets and
also
 build high quality infrastructure, China paid all their blue collar workers with salaries on par with the people with desk
jobs thereby
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jobs, thereby
 giving them a sense of pride and ownership resulting in the creation of world class cities
such
 as Shanghai, Wuhan. These cities in turn attracted a lot of foreign investment leading to the creation of white-collar jobs where people possessing university degrees can
work
. If a country wishes to emulate the fast growth trajectory of China, it would be more apt for them to pay their physical
laborers
someone who works with their hands; someone engaged in manual labor
labourers
 in an equitable way resulting in all round growth.

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