Bullying is a big problem in many schools. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest? Do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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true that in various

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school

children are bullied by other students. In my opinion,

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behind many reasons and steps need to be taken to end up the

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. There are some obvious causes which attribute of bullying of children in school.

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, they are victims of irritation of other students who have jealous

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them. Because of his jealous feeling, many students tease to each other

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result, empathy

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them for each other.

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, they have less learning power. Each student has

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a different understanding

ability to understand to which is taught in school. Some time due to

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bullied, especially

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students have high understand power. There are some considerable steps that should be taken to tackle

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the issue

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of all, confidence of children should be raised. In order to stop bullying, if strength of them are focused rather than weakness, their confidence will improve.

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, they will be irritated easily.

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, students should be aware about bullying. Because of being unaware, despite

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it some students do not report.

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, if they are aware by

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sharing

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with teachers and parents to which Immediately steps can be taken to sort out without

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delay. In conclusion, I believe that due to

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the less understanding ability

and jealous for each other, students are bullied in school.

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could be solved by spreading awareness among them.

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Topic Vocabulary:

Bullying
Harassment
Intimidation
Diversity
Adolescent
Mimic
Aggressive behavior
Cyberbullying
Peer pressure
Social acceptance
Awareness
Conflict resolution
Peer mediation
Consequences
Respect
Kindness
Open communication
Vulnerable
Buddy system

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Bullying is a big problem in many schools. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest? Do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Fully explain your ideas

Scientific research should be funded by governments rather than commercial organizations. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Television dominates the free-time of too many people. It can make people lazy and prevent them from socializing with others. Do you agree or disagree?

Some people think that schools do not do enough to teach young people about how to look after their health. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

With the increased global demand for oil and gas, undiscovered areas of the world should be opened up to access more of these natural resources. To what extent do you agree?

People from many countries are marrying later and having fewer children. Give reasons why this is happening. Are there any positive or negative developments regarding this?