Bullying is a big problem in many schools. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest? Do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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It's
It
true that in various
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school
schools
children are bullied by other students. In my opinion,
this
problem
behind many reasons and steps need to be taken to end up the
problem
. There are some obvious causes which attribute of bullying of children in school.
Firstly
, they are victims of irritation of other students who have jealous
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of
for
them. Because of his jealous feeling, many students tease to each other
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result, empathy
result empathy
and compassion are reduced
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to
in
them for each other.
Secondly
, they have less learning power. Each student has
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a different understanding
different understanding
ability to understand to which is taught in school. Some time due to
this
they get
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bullied, especially
bullied especially
bullying especially
when they are part of
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a class
the class
class
in which
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most
mostly
students have high understand power. There are some considerable steps that should be taken to tackle
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the issue
issue
of bullying.
First
of all, confidence of children should be raised. In order to stop bullying, if strength of them are focused rather than weakness, their confidence will improve.
As a result
, they will be irritated easily.
Secondly
, students should be aware about bullying. Because of being unaware, despite
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Facing
facing
it some students do not report.
However
, if they are aware by
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telling about
tellingabout
bullying, they will be
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sharing
share
their
problem
with teachers and parents to which Immediately steps can be taken to sort out without
further
delay. In conclusion, I believe that due to
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the less understanding ability
less understanding ability
and jealous for each other, students are bullied in school.
However
,
this
problem
could be solved by spreading awareness among them.

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