Bullying is a big problem in many schools. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest? Do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

#schools

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It's

true that in various

schools

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school

children are bullied by other students. In my opinion,

this

problem

behind many reasons and steps need to be taken to end up the

problem

. There are some obvious causes which attribute of bullying of children in school.

Firstly

, they are victims of irritation of other students who have jealous

for

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them. Because of his jealous feeling, many students tease to each other

result empathy

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result, empathy

and compassion are reduced

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them for each other.

Secondly

, they have less learning power. Each student has

different understanding

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a different understanding

ability to understand to which is taught in school. Some time due to

this

they get

bullying especially

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bullied, especially

bullied especially

when they are part of

class

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a class

the class

in which

mostly

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most

students have high understand power. There are some considerable steps that should be taken to tackle

issue

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the issue

of bullying.

First

of all, confidence of children should be raised. In order to stop bullying, if strength of them are focused rather than weakness, their confidence will improve.

As a result

, they will be irritated easily.

Secondly

, students should be aware about bullying. Because of being unaware, despite

facing

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Facing

it some students do not report.

However

, if they are aware by

tellingabout

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telling about

bullying, they will be

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sharing

their

problem

with teachers and parents to which Immediately steps can be taken to sort out without

further

delay. In conclusion, I believe that due to

less understanding ability

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the less understanding ability

and jealous for each other, students are bullied in school.

However

this

problem

could be solved by spreading awareness among them.

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Topic Vocabulary:

Bullying
Harassment
Intimidation
Diversity
Adolescent
Mimic
Aggressive behavior
Cyberbullying
Peer pressure
Social acceptance
Awareness
Conflict resolution
Peer mediation
Consequences
Respect
Kindness
Open communication
Vulnerable
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