You recently applied for two separate jobs. Both have chosen to hire you, but you must write a letter to one of them explaining why you are unable to take the position. Include in your letter: – An apology – An explanation of your situation

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
letter to apologise for not being able to accept the position offered by your
institute
. I am grateful to you for allowing me to join your organisation as a lecturer;
however
, I could not accept
this
job
position.
Although
I have been waiting for
this
golden opportunity to work at your
institute
, I have accepted another
job
offer which is more convenient for my career.
Therefore
, I deeply regret if it causes any inconvenience to you. I would like to explain the reasons for accepting another
job
as a nursing coordinator at a University. It would take only 15 minutes to reach me at work, and
also
offers me a good
job
position which would assist me in getting a placement in a foreign country which is my major goal of life.
Besides
it
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that
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, I would get a chance to visit other countries
along with
a holiday
pacakage
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package
every year.
Hence
, these attractive opportunities tempt me to join
it
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them
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.
This
was a difficult decision for me because your
institute
was ready to give me various benefits in the form of early promotion and high wages. I am well aware
about
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of
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the reputation of your educational
institute
, thereby, looking forward to
work
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working
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with you in future. Thank you for your time and consideration. Yours faithfully, Amandeep Kaur
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task achievement
The letter effectively includes an apology and a clear explanation of the situation, fulfilling the task requirements well.
coherence cohesion
While the letter flows well, consider adding transitional phrases to further improve the coherence between paragraphs.
coherence cohesion
The letter has a clear and logical structure, making it easy to follow the writer's points.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing are appropriately formal and polite, fitting the context of the letter.
coherence cohesion
Each paragraph focuses on a single idea, contributing to the overall clarity of the letter.
task achievement
The response is complete and addresses the task fully, including an apology and an explanation.
task achievement
The writing tone is polite and respectful, which is suitable for an apology letter.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gratitude
  • regret
  • unfortunately
  • opportunity
  • decision
  • career goals
  • personal circumstances
  • alignment
  • difficult choice
  • future opportunities
  • stay connected
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