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Many people these days are now living alone. Is this a positive or a negative development?

#people #development
Across the modern world, many individuals prefer to live alone without anyone. In my opinion,
this
 is negative development which can lead to isolation, potentially harmful situations, as well as problems that will arise in the future.
Firstly
, one serious problem which can arise from living alone is its isolation. Before
this
 lifestyle, people would often meet family members or friends,
for instance
, in the kitchen or hall, whereas now individuals prefer to stay at home alone.
As a result
, people are starting to waste the majority of their time alone at home in their room without meeting other people. Kind of
this
 isolation is not healthy,
moreover
, it can lead to depression and other issues.
Secondly
, live alone at home can gain many dangerous problems.
In other words
, individuals tend to have a chance to gain risky issues as unexpected situations with health.
This
 is particularly concerning for people who have health problems.
Furthermore
, as
this
 will happen in a house where people are alone, nobody would not have any way to save their life.
Finally
, individuals would have
issues
prepare and issue for public distribution or sale
issues
s with creating a family in the future
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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