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many people spoil natural beauties like sea ,beaches ,mountains and lakes .do people responsible for that ?what should be done to stop people to spoil natural beauty ?give the reasons and examples for your answer.

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Sea, beaches, mountains and lakes are most beautiful components of nature. But many people who spoil the natural beauties of sea, beaches, mountains and lakes. In my view point, I think, many people are
also
 responsible for making it less beautiful.
This
 natural components like sea, beaches, mountains and lakes are tourist place. Daily so many kinds of people went there for spending times with family and friends. Some people have concerns and manners to how to deal with
this
 natural place, but some people
does not have
Suggestion
do not have
 any sense and concerns about natural beauties of
this
 place. They throw all chip packets, cane and others useless stuff in anywhere without using any dusting box. Sometimes children destroy the decorations of
this places
Suggestion
this place
these places
 which make less attractive towards tourists.
However
, It is our responsibility to keep clean and beautiful.
Such
 as, if we use a dustbin to throw all kinds of packets, plastics, bottles and many other useless things
then
 it will keep clean and attractive towards tourists. And it's
also
 our duty to protect all decorations and attraction from children and any kind of situations.

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