More and more people are allowing their children to play on computer and tablets as they think that children should learn technology skills. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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fast changing
mordern
belonging to the modern era; since the Middle Ages
modern
Modern
era, technology upgrade day by day and people of each age-group are using many devices. The numerous parents
are encourage
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are encouraged
encourage
are encouraging
their kinds to play computer games because they believe with the help of
this
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, they can develop technology skills. I would like to put shine on
merits
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the merits
and demerits of playing on computer in
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subsequent
subsequently
paragraphs.
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with, there are several reasons which benefit the children in developing their skills while using
eletronic
of or relating to electronics; concerned with or using devices that operate on principles governing the behavior of electrons
electronic
devices.
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, playing on gadgets help kinds in
rising
increasing in quantity or value
raising
the level of their digital understanding which is useful in their life.
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, in today's world most of the school project
work
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will work
require
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required, such
required such
such
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appliances like laptop and tablet etc..
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, latest studies prove that few assignments are done by using
computer
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a computer
which need technology intelligence of
child
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children
the child
a child
.
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, games which the youngster play on
digitial
displaying numbers rather than scale positions
digital
gadgets developed their graphical knowledge as well as increasing their creativity. On the
contracy
very opposed in nature or character or purpose
contrary
contract
, excess usage of these games
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also have
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also has
negative effect
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a negative effect
negative effects
the negative effect
.
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and foremost, it
adversely harm
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adversely harms
our health.
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, recent
reaserach
systematic investigation to establish facts
research
study that most of the teenagers
nowdays
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now days
uses
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are using
mobile phone
alot
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a lot
which result in reducing their eye sight.
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, child's concentration power decline and because of
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, they are not able to focus on study and their
carrer
the particular occupation for which you are trained
career
carer
carers
.
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but not least, it
decrease
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decreases
their
communicational
the activity of communicating; the activity of conveying information
communication
communications
power to
intreact
act together or towards others or with others
interact
with
people which
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people, which
sometimes affect their behaviour
also
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. To encapsulate the whole notion, I gather that everything
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has
two sides
that is
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advantages and disadvantages.
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Digital
games benefiting the kids.
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, if they
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use
over the
limit
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limit, then
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it
have
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has
awful
result
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resulted
as well.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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