You work at home a d have a problem with a piece of equipment that you use for your job. Write a letter to the shop or company which supplied the equipment in your lettee Describe the problem with the equipment Explain how this problem is affecting your work Say waht you want the shop or compny to do?

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing

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letter to express my disappointment with the use of a laptop that I bought from your store on August 1, 2024. The order number is Qwery.

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, when I bought the laptop it was in good condition

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, after

few

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days, I was not able to connect to the internet. It shows that there is no internet network but on other devices connection works very well. I checked the settings too,

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and unfortunately

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unfortunately

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I found that there is

issue

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with

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device.

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, I am a customer service representative who needs internet all the time to connect to calls but

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this

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issue for the past couple of

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I am not able to attend any queries.

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, I got many warnings from my employer. If

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obstacle

remain

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same

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the same

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for the upcoming days, I can

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lose

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my job. To

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address

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the issue, I would like to request

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that

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you

either

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apply

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repair

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device if

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apply

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possible within one day

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I have no other option

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returning. Hopefully, you will take prompt action to resolve the problem. Looking forward to hearing from you soon. Yours sincerely, Waris Saroye

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Ensure that you provide specific details like the model of the laptop and more identifiable information for the order.

coherence cohesion

Work on improving your sentence structure and grammar for better clarity.

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You have clearly identified the problem with the equipment and how it affects your work.

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The letter maintains a polite and professional tone throughout.

coherence cohesion

The letter is well-structured with appropriate paragraphs and clear progression of ideas.

coherence cohesion

You included a greeting and a closing that fit the context of a formal letter.

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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

198 words

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