Some people believe that children should be given lessons on how to manage money in the school. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Social and public organizations,
such
as charities, create special events to be celebrated, like 'National Children's Day' and 'National Non-smoking Day'. There are a lot of factors that motivated these organizations to invent and give special names
in particular
days, but none of them are for
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the worst
the bad
purposes.
However
, these particular events are less effective due to the high amount of names have been given out.
First
of all, there are a lot of special names in some particular days have been named and all of them were purposely made to lead a better life for humanity. Take
for example
, National Children's Day which indicate the importance of children health and growth. There are a lot of unfortunate children around the world who do not have
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the luxury
luxury
and opportunity to study and receive a good health treatment.
In other words
, by creating
such
an event, hopefully people will help and volunteer in either by sharing some amount of money or doing social activities.
Thus
, even if some special names are not really urgent to be created, none of them are made for bad purposes.
Secondly
, due to the many creations of special names, people tend not to take these much more seriously than before. Even though the events were made to remind each individual to do some good deeds, too many of them will become less worth it.
Thus
, people will eventually take
such
days, particular days with special names, for granted. So, in order to make it more effective the amount of events need to be reduced and only keep the most important one. That's why, unless the number of events
the state or fact of existing
being
been
beeing
decreased, it will not give any special notice for people.
Therefore
, Social and public organizations need to make some priority and put the most urgent and important one. In conclusion, despite the positive reasons in making special names
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of
for
on
particular days, the effectiveness will go downwards because there
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were
are
already too many of them.

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