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The role of a library in keeping books is obsolete. So universities should use digital media. What is your opinion? Discuss the advantages and disadvantages.

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Library
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The library
 is the collection of numerous books of different categories.
Teacher
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The teacher
A teacher
 can't teach the entire subject in the
classrom
a room in a school where lessons take place
classroom
, students need to refer textbooks and many reference books to procure the knowledge. Nowadays, technology plays a significant role so that,
majority
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the majority
 of the masses prefer to read
in
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on
 smart mobiles, laptops, computers, tablets and other smart gadgets. According to me, I opine
universites
the body of faculty and students at a university
universities
, schools and colleges to utilise the internet and digital media along with the libraries. The following subsequent paragraphs will give a better insight into
pros
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the pros
 and cons of
this
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 topic.
Instead
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 of carrying plenty of physical copies of books, it is
obsolutly
completely and without qualification; used informally as intensifiers
absolutely
pramatic
concerned with practical matters
pragmatic
 to maintain a single weightless gadget which fits in our pocket. All those books which are available in
library
Suggestion
the library
libraries
, can be accessed from any part of the world through our mobile, if there is an internet connection.
Moreover
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, size of pdf file and word file is less when compared to other audio and video files. Not only reading books, but
also
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 audio books are booming in
this
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 decade. Audio books, ease the task of a human being.
For example
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, one of my friends revise the topics by listening these audio books in
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last few hours
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the last few hours
 prior to his examination.
However
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, listening for
few minutes
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a few minutes
 has enormous impact rather than reading for hours. On the contrast, usage of digital media
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also have
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also has
 a negative phase.
Although
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 it is preferable to use social media, it paves the way to
helath
a healthy state of wellbeing free from disease
health
isuues
prepare and issue for public distribution or sale
issues
 if we
over
at any time
ever
 use. It results in affecting
eye-sight
normal use of the faculty of vision
eyesight
 and severe headache, if it is used for many hours. Digital media
has
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have
 many issues so that
,
Accept space
,
 people
also
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 read books in
Library
Suggestion
the Library
.
For example
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, my sister who
spend
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spends
 most of her time
infront
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in front
 of
computer
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a computer
the computer
 still
read
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reads
 books when her eyes get stressed. To conclude, both online and offline reading is
to encouraged
Suggestion
to encourage
 in
universities so
Accept comma addition
universities, so
 that, it is entirely student choice to opine the mode of study.
Moreover
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,
universties
the body of faculty and students at a university
universities
 should maintain and update the book resources and should provide access to students so that, they can
procoure
get by special effort
procure
 knowledge from
any where
at or in or to any place
anywhere
 in the college.
Although
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 digital world is booming in
this
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 decade, certain individuals still visit the library to study in that atmosphere.

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