We are becoming increasingly dependent on computers. They are used in business, hospitals, crime detection and even to fly planes. What things will they be used in the future? Is this dependence on computers a good thing or should be more suspicious of their benefits?

Computers turned the world into a small meeting and communication place, it helps in many sectors like, education, government and medical. Scientist believe in themselves that
this
technology will build a developed future and people can rely on since it's a good thing that will change their lives. Many things can be done for a sophisticated future, that can help people.
First
, in space, astronauts can build their own equipment that
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makes
make
it easy
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for
to
them to discover new planets and places that can’t be
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reached
reach
easily, and check if there are resources
such
as water or oxygen, and if
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humans
a human
human
can live there. Computers can help people to increase their memory storage, by planting microelectronic chips in their brains, where they can store more info and assist in memorizing.
For example
,
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the China Aerospace Association
China Aerospace Association
,
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is working
are working
on developing
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a space machine
space machine
that can walk on
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the moon
moon
that absorb
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damage
damages
, to discover the
second
part of it.
On the other hand
, society these days believe and rely on computers, since it's turning their work simple and making more profit.
First
, man can depend on
this
advanced technology, it helped several governments in cyber crimes, discovered drug and weapon dealers that are ruining societies.
Second
, computers opened the opportunity for
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a big number
big number
of people to find new places where they believed there aren't exist. Addition to that, humans are closer to each other now, due to social media and internet, where they can connect easily.
For example
, Aliexpress website that
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collapses
collapse
millions of Chinese shops in it, where it facilitates
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the person's life
person's life
people life
to shop online and trade faster,
this
encourages and help the economy of their country. As a conclusion, computer is needed in our daily life and future, we can control it and don't let technology replace us.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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