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The graph below shows the proportion of four different materials that were recycled from 1982 to 2010 in a particular country.

The graph below shows the proportion of four different materials that were recycled from 1982 to 2010 in a particular country.
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The graph illustrates the recycling percentage of four different
materials
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 in a span of 28 years from 1982 to 2010 in one country. The
materials
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 that were covered in the study are paper and cardboard, glass containers,
aluminium
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 cans and plastics.
Overall
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, plastics, cardboard and
aluminium
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 were the most recycled
materials
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 but they did not show much growth in their recycling
rate
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 from 1986-2010. Meanwhile, the proportion of
aluminium
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 cans getting recycled increased substantially. In the case of paper and cardboard, a little escalation was seen with
the
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a
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 total increase of 5%,
while
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 the recycling
rate
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 of glass containers was 60% in 2010 increasing by 10% as compared to 1982. Both of these
materials
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 showed a significant decline in the recycling
rate
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 in 1990 with a sharp increase in 1994.
While
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 plastic showed significant growth in 2010 as compared to
1990s
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the 1990s
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 when it just started to be recycled,
aluminium
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 was one
such
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 material that showed the highest and
gradual
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most gradual
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 growth in the recycling
rate
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, rising from about 3% in 1986 and reaching approximately 35% in 2010.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words materials, aluminium, rate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • recycled
  • materials
  • percentage
  • paper and cardboard
  • glass
  • plastic
  • metal
  • stable
  • noticeable
  • rise
  • significant increase
  • accounting for
  • consistent
  • ste steadily
  • dramatically
  • nearly
  • worth noting
  • relatively low
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