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Some people believe that living in an apartment instead of a university dormitory has many advantages while others say that it has many disadvantages. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of living in an apartment instead of a university dormitory. Also, state your preference and say why you would choose that.

Some people argue that renting an
apartment
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 offers more benefits than living in a
university
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dormitory
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,
while
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 others believe the opposite.
This
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 essay will discuss both the advantages and disadvantages of living in an
apartment
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instead
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 of a
dormitory
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, and will
also
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 state my personal preference. On the one hand, living in an
apartment
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 provides greater freedom, as there are usually fewer regulations compared to
university
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dormitories
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.
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, many
dormitories
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 impose curfews, requiring
students
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 to return before a certain time.
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, renting an
apartment
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 allows individuals to enjoy more personal space, which is particularly beneficial for those who are unaccustomed to sharing a room with strangers or non-relatives.
On the other hand
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,
university
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dormitories
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 offer several advantages for
students
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. They are often conveniently located near the campus, making it easier to attend classes and participate in
university
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 activities.
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,
dormitories
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 encourage social interaction, as
students
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 can build friendships, study together, and exchange ideas. For extroverted
students
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 who wish to expand their social circle, living in a
dormitory
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 can be an ideal option. In conclusion, I personally prefer renting an
apartment
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 because I value privacy and am easily overstimulated by noise and crowded environments.
Nevertheless
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, both options have their own advantages and disadvantages depending on individual preferences.
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 living in an
apartment
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 offers greater independence, staying in a
dormitory
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 can help
students
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 develop a more active social life.

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coherence
Try to keep one big idea in each paragraph and start with a clear topic sentence.
coherence
Use more simple linking words to show how ideas go from one to the next.
task
Add more specific facts or short examples to back up your points.
tone
Check the tone so it stays neutral and fits a formal essay.
task response
You make a clear view and say your mind at the end.
coherence
You link ideas well and show the good sides of both options.
The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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