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nowadays more and more people have access to the internet. but constant availability of any information worsens people`s memory and critical thinking skills. to what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #access #internet #availability #information #people`s #memory #skills
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Access to
internet
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 services has become easy and affordable to many individuals across the globe these days.
However
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,
this
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 has negatively impacted people`s cognitive abilities
nfortunately
by bad luck
unfortunately
. In
this
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 essay I will explain why I totally agree with
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 opinion. There are several reasons why easy access to the
internet
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 is
harmfull
causing or capable of causing harm
harmful
 to an individual`s mental abilities.
First
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 of all, people can get the information they are looking for with a click of a
botton
a round fastener sewn to shirts and coats etc to fit through buttonholes
button
 without making big efforts.
As a result
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, many individuals can not retain information for
long time
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a long time
.
Also
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, technological advancement has improved what scientists call Artificial
Intellegence which
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Intelligence, which
Intelligence which
 can do almost all activities a human`s brain can perform easily and quickly.
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, many researchers depend on
this
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 invention to conduct their studies.
the
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The
 more a student
relys
have confidence or faith in
relies
 on Artificial
Intellegence
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Intelligence
, the more likely their analytical skills will be hindered.
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, many pupils do their homework using the
internet
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, making them unable to understand their lessons properly.
This
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 is because they do not spend enough time to
workout
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work out
 any assignment on their own.
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, they rely heavily on smart technology to solve mathematical questions
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 of using the manual methods.
Although
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 I fully understand people who advocate for the advantages of
internet
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 availability in terms of storing and sharing
large amount
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large amounts
a large amount
 of data on small hard drives. Unfortunately, many people misuse the
internet
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 by excessively relying on it to do all activities
instead
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 of using their brains.
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, students are cheating on exams using smart phone technology
whis
expresses the means used
with
 very difficult to be detected and investigated,
acheiving
to gain with effort
achieving
 high marks which do not reflect their real abilities
.
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.
 To conclude, I strongly believe that easy access to the
internet
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 services has badly affected individuals` abilities to memorize and analyse information as they tend to overuse these services.
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